@hikari
Well done, seriously! <3

Ok I've been a professional musician for over 30 yrs & honestly I've heard so much worse from a whole buncha much more experienced folks.

And even though it's melodically & harmonically kind of awkward, there's a few sweet moves in there so you're totally headed in the right direction.

Also, rhythmically it's perfect & you've put the structure together beautifully. :)

You're obviously talented, please keep at it?

Ok unsolicited commentary over. :P <3